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The graph below shows electricity production (in terawatt hours) in France between! 1980 and 2012

The graph below shows electricity production (in terawatt hours) in France between! 1980 and 2012
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The line graph compares the amount of
electricity
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 produced in France using four different sources of
power
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 over a
period
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 of 32 years.
It is clear that
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 nuclear
power
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 was by far the most important means of
electricity
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 generation over the
period
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 shown. Renewables provided the lowest amount of
electricity
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 in each year. In 1980, thermal
power
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 stations were the main source of
electricity
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 in France, generating around 120
terawatt
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hours
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 of
power
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. Nuclear and hydroelectric
power
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 stations produced just under 75
terawatt
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hours
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 of
electricity
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 each, and renewables provided a negligible amount. Just one year later, nuclear
power
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 overtook thermal
power
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 as the primary source of
electricity
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. Between 1980 and 2005,
electricity
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 production from nuclear
power
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 rose dramatically to a peak of 430
terawatt
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hours
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.
By contrast
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, the figure for thermal
power
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 fell to only 50
terawatt
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hours
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 in 1985
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and remained at
this
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 level for the rest of the
period
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. Hydroelectric
power
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 generation remained relatively stable, at between 50 and 80
terawatt
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hours
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, for the whole 32-year
period
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, but renewable
electricity
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 production saw only a small rise to approximately 25
terawatt
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hours
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 by 2012
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, power, period, terawatt, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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