The graph below shows electricity production (in terawatt hours) in France between 1980 and 2012.

The graph below shows electricity production (in terawatt hours) in France between 1980 and 2012.
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The illustration provides data related to four different ways of electrical
power
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generation in France, over the course of thirty years, starting in 1980 until recently. It's conspicuously obvious that the dominant source of
electricity
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over the period shown, generating
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maximum
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430
terawatt
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per hour,
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the lowest portion of
electricity
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generated was for renewables. In 1980, thermal
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stations were the main source of
electricity
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in France, generating around 120
terawatt
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hours
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of
power
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. Nuclear and hydroelectric
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stations produced just under 75
terawatt
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hours
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of
electricity
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each, and renewables provided a negligible amount. Just one year later, nuclear
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overtook thermal
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as the primary source of
electricity
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. Between 1980 and 2005,
electricity
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production from nuclear
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rose dramatically to a peak of 430
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hours
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.
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, the figure for thermal
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fell to only 50
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hours
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in 1985
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and remained at
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level for the rest of the period. Hydroelectric
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generation remained relatively stable, at between 50 and 80
terawatt
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hours
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, for the whole 32-year period, but renewable
electricity
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production saw only a small rise to approximately 25
terawatt
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hours
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by 2012.
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