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The graph below shows electricity production (in terawatt hours) in France between 1980 and 2012.

The graph below shows electricity production (in terawatt hours) in France between 1980 and 2012.
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The illustration provides data related to four different ways of electrical
power
 generation in France, over the course of thirty years, starting in 1980 until recently. It's conspicuously obvious that the dominant source of
electricity
 over the period shown, generating
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 430
terawatt
 per hour,
while
 the lowest portion of
electricity
 generated was for renewables. In 1980, thermal
power
 stations were the main source of
electricity
 in France, generating around 120
terawatt
hours
 of
power
. Nuclear and hydroelectric
power
 stations produced just under 75
terawatt
hours
 of
electricity
 each, and renewables provided a negligible amount. Just one year later, nuclear
power
 overtook thermal
power
 as the primary source of
electricity
. Between 1980 and 2005,
electricity
 production from nuclear
power
 rose dramatically to a peak of 430
terawatt
hours
.
By contrast
, the figure for thermal
power
 fell to only 50
terawatt
hours
 in 1985
,
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and remained at
this
 level for the rest of the period. Hydroelectric
power
 generation remained relatively stable, at between 50 and 80
terawatt
hours
, for the whole 32-year period, but renewable
electricity
 production saw only a small rise to approximately 25
terawatt
hours
 by 2012.
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