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many people like to go on holiday abroad, while others believe it is better to visit places within their own country discuss both views and give your opinion

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There is no doubt that
people
 waiting for their
holiday
 to be more relaxed and take a break from their work. Some
people
 believe that it is much better to try places within their country during their
holiday
,
while
 others like to travel to another nation. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss both views and draw my own conclusion. In terms of the advantages of the following idea. Spending the
holiday
within
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 the countryside is much better. The main reason given to support
this
 claim is that they will be more familiar with their
people
 and areas. To illustrate, they can communicate easily and without language barriers with anyone
as well as
 they will know all areas that it is could be a chance of risk when they visited.
However
, other
people
 would like to travel to another country and
this
 is because they love to discover new areas and make new relationships
such
 as booking
with
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a group travel
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 to try different activities and obtain new experiences at the same time making new friends. In conclusion, I believe that spending the
holiday
 all over my countryside
it
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would be an amazing experience and
this
 is because
i
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 think we need to know our places more and be
a
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proud
about
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 what we actually have compared to other nations.
Furthermore
, we would save money and avoid high
travel’s
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