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Children are generally more successful in foreign language studies than adults.Thus,it is better to learn languages in childhood. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experiance

#children #language #studies #adults #languages #childhood #experiance
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 brain nerves of kids
more
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are more
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 vivid and open
perception
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perceptions
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 rather than adults. Their fresh memories are capable to keep whole words where they hear from.
These kind
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 of talents being them
a
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apply
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bilingual children. I have
a
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apply
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several reasons
that
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why
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am strongly agree
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strongly agree
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 with
this
 view. First and foremost,
Immigrant’s
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Immigrant
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 kids
has
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have
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 a congenital skill to learn multiple languages. They
are
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spend ample time with parents and expose
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to language
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dialog
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.
This
 is
cause
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caused
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to
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them to
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 thrive
their
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in their
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 mother tongue.
Additionally
, at the beginning of
school
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the school
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era
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,era
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 they hear
second
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a second
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language
 from
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the lecturer
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lecturer
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lecturers
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 and class fellows. Yet, these reasons
insufficient
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are insufficient
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 by themselves. It
is require
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is required
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 to study formal writing and reading syllabus in order to improve
academic
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the academic
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 side of
language
.
On the other hand
, it is important to encourage
children
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children's
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language
course
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courses
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 at the beginning of
early
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the early
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 age era. Their concentration
steady
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is steady
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 and vivid to expose different
language
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languages
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. In terms of accurate
language
 education and
institution
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,institution
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 kids can
be
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apply
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grow as
a
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apply
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bilingual.
Moreover
, many studies know
fact
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the fact
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 that international companies
expecting
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expect
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 multiple
language
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languages
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 from candidates. It is prominent
them
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to them
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 as
a
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the
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 right candidate and may able to win
rival
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rivals
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 towards their opponent. Nowadays,
importance
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the importance
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 of
language
 education
still
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is still
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 uninterested by parents. They should
be inform
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be informed
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 how
importance
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the importance
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 of
language
require
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requirements
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 for their future. In
conclusion
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,conclusion
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 based on
discussion
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the discussion
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,
kid’s
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kids’
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 brain nerves are capable to learn
new
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a new
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language
beside
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besides
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 of mother tongue. If they divert professional
institution
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institutions
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 and native speakers that would be
a
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the
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 best investment for their future.
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