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Children are generally more successful in foreign language studies than adults. Thus, it is better to learn languages in childhood. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experiance

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The brain nerves of kids are more vivid and open perceptions rather than adults. Their fresh
memories
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 capable to keep whole words where they are heard from. These kinds of talents are in their bilingual children. I have several reasons why I strongly agree with
this
 view. First and foremost, Immigrant kids’ has a congenital skill to learn multiple
languages
. They are spending ample time with
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 and expose to
language
 dialogue.
This
 caused them to thrive in their mother tongue.
Additionally
, at the beginning of the school , an era they hear a second
language
 from lecturers and class fellows. Yet, these reasons are insufficient by themselves. It is required to study formal writing and reading syllabus in order to improve the academic side of speeches.
On the other hand
, it is important to encourage children's
language
 courses at the beginning of early childhood. Their concentration is steady and vivid to expose different
languages
. In terms of accurate
language
 education and ,institution kids can grow as bilingual.
Moreover
, many studies know the fact that international companies expect multiple
languages
 from candidates. It is prominent to them as the right candidate and may able to win rivals towards their opponent. Nowadays, the importance of
language
 expression is still uninterested by parents. They should inform how the importance of
language
 requirements for their future. In,
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conclusion based on the discussion, kids’ brain nerves are capable to learn
languages
besides
 of mother tongue. If they divert professional institutions and native speakers that would be the best investment for their future.
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