Government investment in arts such as music and theater is a wastage of money. Government must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that investing money in arts-related activities is not essential and
considered
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squandering because
this
money is needed to
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public services. In my opinion, I strongly agree with
this
point of view because I
beleive
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believe
that
priorities
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should be
gived
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given
to developing
people
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lifestyle
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. Government should invest in public infrastructures for many reasons.
Firstly
, upgrading transportation systems and utilities is crucial for the
wellfare
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welfare
of citizens because it will not only offer better traffic
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and reduce congestion
problem
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but
also
lead to various
benifits
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benefits
in other fields.
For example
,
a
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good public transport
encourage
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people to use buses and railway rather than using private cars
wich
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reduce
the
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pollution and attract foreigner to invest in the country.
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, investing
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amount of money in
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could be

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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