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one problem faced by almost every city is traffic congestion. what do you think the cuses are? what solutions can you suggest?

#city #traffic #congestion #cuses
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technology
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the
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transportation increasing day by day which is
main
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 reason
of
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traffic
 and some rules can reduce it to some level. In
this
essay
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 we will discuss other reasons
of
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this
 problem with
relevant
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solution
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. To commence with, Change in lifestyle
being
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major
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a major
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 issue for
traffice
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traffic
 congestion in almost every city because
number
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a number
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 of folk
wants
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 privacy in their life
due to
 which they choose their own
car
 or bike or
other source
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 to drive rather
then
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 buses. Private vehicles
also
 directly
becomes
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 a reason
of
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traffic
 congestion.
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, In
US
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number
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 of cars
are
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 so much in numbers as
comparison
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 to
another nations
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.
Moreover
, Financial changes
also
leads
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 to more
traffic
 on roads as nobody has to purchase their
car
on
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in
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 cash because different types of loans, insurances and
another
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 financing options are there in
market
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due to
 which it is really very easy to get a
car
 or bike.
For instance
, In Canada buying a
car
 is way too easy
due to
 various financing options. On the other side,
traffic
 becomes
major
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a major
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 issue to concern about because it leads
more
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to more
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 accidents or mishappenings
everyday
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. To solve
this
 problem government should make strict rules with some punishments as it works very
good
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 in Dubai,
for
instance
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 because
there
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their
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 folks have to pay
very
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 high amount to break any rule which will help in
reduction
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the reduction
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 of
traffic
.
To conclude
, the long-term solution for
traffic
 is
contribution
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a contribution
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 by both
administartion
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administration
 and citizens to make and follow rules and minimize
privte
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private
 vehicles as much as we can.
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