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The charts below show the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#show #value #country #exports #categories #percentage #change #category #summarises #information #features #comparisons
The three bar charts show the average
proportion
 of
consumption
on
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of
show examples
sodium
, saturated fats and added
sugar
 in
breakfast
, lunch,
dinner
 and
snacks
 in the United States.
It is clear that
 the
USA
people
 consume the highest
proportion
 of
sodium
 and saturated fat
in
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at
show examples
dinner
,
while
 the highest
proportion
 of added
sugar
 can be consumed in
the
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apply
show examples
snacks
.
USA
people
 consumed
sodium
 in
the
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their
show examples
breakfast
 and
snacks
 are at the same
proportion
.
Dinner
 is provided
almost
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with almost
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over
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apply
show examples
two-fifth of
sodium
 and nearly 40% of saturated fat, which are more than 14% and 11% of the second largest category, lunch.
The
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In the
show examples
USA
people
 consumed much less
sodium
 in
snacks
 and breakfasts, which are only 14%.
Also
,
The
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in The
show examples
USA
people
 consumed much less saturated fat in
breakfast
, which
around
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is around
show examples
 a quarter of total
consumption
. Another point is that
the
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in the
show examples
USA
people
 consumed the highest amount of added
sugar
 in
snacks
, at 43%, which
nearly
Add a missing verb
is nearly
show examples
 double
of
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apply
show examples
the second
consumption
 category,
dinner
 (23%). Americans
consumes
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consume
show examples
 the least added
sugar
 in
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
breakfast
, which is 3% less than the
consumption
 in lunch.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, consumption, sodium, sugar, breakfast, dinner, snacks, usa, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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