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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six year old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter, Explain why you would like the job Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ. Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia. Write at lease 150 words.

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Dear
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 Adam, I am writing to express my candidate for
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 advertisement in an
Austrailan
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Australian
 magazine that you posted. My name is Leyla Karimli and I
am
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recently graduated from the
child care
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asisstance
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assistance
 program. I was
a
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honor
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 student and there
are
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 some reference
letter
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parent
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which
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 I worked as
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babysitting
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 with their children. I am
fun-loving
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, energetic and
realible
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reliable
 person.
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, I have
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 interest
to
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 child
phsicology
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psychology
 and it is very important to protect children's mental health for me.
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 why I always act very sensitive in these issues. We will
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play educational games together and spend our time very
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 and enjoyable.
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, you will ensure
about
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your kid if you will select me. By the way, in my leisure
time
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 I would like to visit museums and to learn
history
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 of
this
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 country. I am
very
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 outgoing person and it would be
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 opportunity to develop my general culture. Thank you in advance, I will
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 your positive answer with impatience. Leyla Karimli, Yours sincerely,
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