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The charts Below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the word. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relevant.

The charts Below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the word. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relevant.
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The Pie Charts compare the proportion of using
water
 in three sectors which are
industrial
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the industrial
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secto
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sector
, agriculture and household work in six different
parts
 of the world.
Overall
, the illustration shows that
water
 is highly used in
agriculture
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the agriculture
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 field in Latin
America
, Africa, South East
Asia
 and Central
Asia
.
However
, in
other
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the other
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 two areas which are North
America
 and
Europe
,
industrial
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the industrial
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 sector is dominating in terms of
water
uses
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use
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.
Beforehead
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Before head
Beforehand
,
agriculture
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the agriculture
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 sector in South
America
, Africa and different
parts
 of
Asia
 occupy the largest portion of total used
water
.
Although
 the amount for South
America
 is 71%, it is 81%, 84% and 88% for Southeast
Asia
, Africa and Central
Asia
 respectively.
On the other hand
, the number is significantly low in North
America
 where only 39% and
also
 in
Europe
 where only 32% are used in
this
 sector.
In contrast
, in
Europe
, 53% of
total
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the total
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 used is in the field of industry,
whereas
 in North
America
 the number is 49%. For domestic purposes, each
areas
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area
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 spend a little amount of
water
, though the number is comparatively high in South Athoygh which is 15% and it is comparatively low in
to
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apply
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different
parts
 of
Asia
 which is 7% only.
Finally
, it can be stated that
water
 is mostly used in different
parts
 of the globe
except
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forexcept
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Europe
 and USA.
Also
, domestic sectors are least
priotiaed
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prioritised
prioritized
 in all given areas.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, parts, america, asia, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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