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Governments should make more effort to promote alternative sources of energy. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#governments #effort #alternative #sources #energy
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 vital in a technological era and
thus
 lawmaker should build extra efforts to encourage different
sources
 of
energy
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 essay would shed light on the valid points in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with the favour of notion,there are innumerable factors behind the proportion The first and foremost point is that owing to unsustainable use of primary
energy
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energy
source
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also
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a survey done by
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 environmental organisation where found that if we depend on a single
source
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energy
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 the resources of non-renewable
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 of
energy
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 threat of extinction.
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sources
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energy
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 as a
source
 of pollution
thus
 which leads to global warming .inaddition
due to
 relying on a single
source
 of
energy
 the cost of
power
 is
also
 increasing with time and
therefore
 lawmakers should emphasise
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the
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alternative
source
 of
energy
 because it helps not only to reduce the pollution but
also
 helps to decrease the cost of
power
 . In conclusion,
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 tend to reiterate that
although
 we mostly use the primary
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energy
 we
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 make effort to shift to
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alternative
sources
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energy
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • spearheading
  • sustainable
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • transitioning
  • economic implications
  • government policies
  • research and development
  • national energy security
  • public-private sector collaboration
  • diversifying
  • environmental impact
  • clean energy
  • industry growth
  • dependence on imported fuels
  • alternative sources
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