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Nowadays, many students live with their families while others go to another city to study at a university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#students #families #city #study #university
Australia and out of the same country. It
also
 shows the number of citizens living in 3 different locations ( urban, rural and town) between the period of 1995 and 2010.
Overall
, it is clear from the bar chart that a majority of individuals were born in the cities
while
 a small percentage were given birth in towns and some in rural areas.
To begin
 with, in both 1995 and 2010, most individuals were born in
the
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cities outside of Australia with both attaining 60%. In 1995, 40% of people were given birth out of the country in the rural areas, the figure decreased in 2010 to less than 20%.
Moreover
, in 1995 those born in towns and in
the
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rural areas had a percentage of 20 and 30 respectively. The numbers went to about 10% for both in 2010.
Furthermore
, those born in town had the figures
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 from 50% to more than 60% in 2010.
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