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The chart below gives information about trends in internet use by females in the USA in two years.

The chart below gives information about trends in internet use by females in the USA in two years.
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The chart
descibes
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describes
 the proportions of
female
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the female
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 population using
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the interet
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interet
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Internet
 in 2000 and 2001 by
age
groups
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.
Overall
, the higher the
age
 the lower
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the
percantage
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percentage
 of females who browse the internet. The time dynamics shows us that in general in 2001 the
interent
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internet
 usage of
women
 increased; for older
women
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,women
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 the
increasment
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increase
 was much more significant than for younger
one
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. In 2000,
a
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slightly above 90 % of 12-15 years old girls used the internet. The proportion for the consequent
age
 group of 16–18 years old is just under 90 %.
Then
 for 19-24 and 25-
35
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 the values are 80 % and around 75 %,
respectivelly
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respectively
. The
graduall
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gradual
gradually
 decrease continues
untill
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until
 the
age
 group 46 – 55, after that the proportion
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 a sharp decrease to the lowest point of 25 % for
women
 65+.
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2001, all girls ages 16 – 18 use the internet.
Then
 the proportion sharply decreases by 20 % which is describing the
interent
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internet
 usage of young
women
age
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 19-24.
Furthermore
, we can notice
steady
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a steady
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 decrease to about 65 % for
age
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the age
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 group of 46-55. The intensive drop for
senior
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seniors
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 stops at 30 %, which is describing the proportions for all
women
 aged 65 and more.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 4 times.
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