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Many countries use fossil fuels (coal, oil, natural gas) as the main source of energy. However, in some countries the use of the alternative sources of energy (wind energy and solar energy) is encouraged. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this development?

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Nowadays, a
lot
 of countries
is
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encouraged
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encouraging
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 the
comsumption
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consumption
 of
energy
 by means of
environmental
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environmentally
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 friendly sources.
Whereas
, the main source of
energy
of
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in
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 most countries
are
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is
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 fossil fuels. I strongly agree with the idea of
consumption
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the consumption
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 of
energy
 by the
use
 of our natural
resources
.
For instance
, by making
use
 of the wind to provide us
light
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with light
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 and electricity.
In addition
 to that, the sun can
also
 hand us power
by
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through
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 the solar
energy
 that it provides.
Firstly
, the
use
 of fossil
fuel
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fuels
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 is conventional
to
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in
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 most countries.
Widely
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use
 of fossil fuels like coal, oil and natural gas
maybe
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may be
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due to
 market availability.
While
on the other hand
 in our country here in the Philippines the
use
 of alternative sources of
energy
 is highly encouraged. Our government has a designated institution
that is
 responsible for monitoring the stability of our environment.
Secondly
,
i
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I
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 disagree
the
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with the
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 consistent
use
 of fossil fuel because it emits a
lot
 of carbon dioxide that contributes to air pollution. It can
also
 gradually destroy the ozone layer
that is
 responsible to protect us from sweltering weather. Improper waste disposal of fossil fuel can harm our
body
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bodies
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 and the
enviroment
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environment
. There
is
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are
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 a
lot
 of oil
spilled
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spilt
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 situations that
has
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have
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 been reported
in
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on
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 the
televesion
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television
 recently. It is very alarming knowing that the oil can intoxicate sea creatures which we usually intake as
a
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food.
Thirdly
,
the
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natural
resources
does
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do
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 not produce harmful chemical
thus
, it helps us to have
a
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refined air to inhale. Using our natural
resources
 as
a
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source
energy
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of energy
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 can help us save money and save our environment. In conclusion,
we
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our
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 consumption of
energy
 by
the
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apply
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making
use
 of our natural
resources
 may
takes
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take
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 a
lot
 of time to produce
it
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but, it will be a big help for
our
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the
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 next generation to experience the beauty of nature.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable
  • renewable energy
  • non-renewable resources
  • carbon footprint
  • greenhouse gases
  • energy independence
  • climate change
  • environmental impact
  • infrastructural development
  • technological innovation
  • economic disruption
  • fossil fuel depletion
  • energy transition
  • consistency and reliability
  • wildlife habitat
  • natural landscapes
  • solar panels
  • wind turbines
  • energy consumption
  • ecological balance
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