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In many countries, not enough students study science subjects. What are the causes? What will be the effect on society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#countries #students #study #science #subjects #effect #society
Students who study
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subject
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science
 are only a few in some countries. In my opinion,
this
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society because
science
 education is a basic foundation and
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 factor that can help many aspects to progress for a nation to develop
further
.
Science
 is a basic knowledge that every
country
 needs to put a big concern about it. Unlike the other subjects,
science
 is the only
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 that walk around almost every
aspects
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in
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 our life.
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, engineering;
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science
 that plays a major role
for
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 providing better manufacturing, building, construction, and design. If some countries did not have
a
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good quality
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 students or people that
mastering
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this topics
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, I assured
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chaos in their societies.
For example
, Timor Leste, with
their
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 GDP
only
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of only
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 400ish
dollar
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dollars
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 per capita, make them
as
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one of the poorest
country
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countries
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 in the world. There is no domestic product,
neither
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nor
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 manufacturing places that could attract other parties around the world to invest in
this
country
,
hence
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economic
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 is only
stagnan
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stagnant
stagnation
. There are many reasons behind those things
such
 as internal conflicts,
unequality
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inequality
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economy
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, and corruption but the major cause that turns them into it, was the lack of education
especially
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 in
science
.
However
, if the people of Timor Leste put
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science
 as the top
of
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priority, they might have some chances to build their own manufacturing plant
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 or develop their products to create a better economy.
This
 is how some of
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the advance
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advance
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country
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countries
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 in the world can go
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others. America is one example
why
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science
 could bring them
as
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 the top of
economy
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the economy
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 globally. Their breakthrough
of
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science
 has leveraged the
country
 not only in economics but
also
various
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 aspects of life for
whole
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 nation. In my opinion,
science
 subjects
is
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 very important for a
country
 to develop.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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