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The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the differences in both years 1995 and 2010, among Australian citizens and
people
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 from other countries and the area where they decided to live.
Overall
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, it can be seen that by far cities represent the most popular choice by
people
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 and
this
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 has always been in 1995 and in 2010,
in addition
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, the gap in percentage rose significantly and fewer
people
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 had chosen to spend their life far away from cities. A more detailed look at the bar chart reveals that in 1995 the percentage of
people
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 born in Australia that preferred to live in a city was about 50%,
this
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 situation do not change a lot in 2010 but increased a little, reaching just over 60%. Living in towns or rural areas become less popular after 1995 and both accounted for even less than 20% in 2010. Citizens from other countries increase the number of
people
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 living in a city, starting from 60% in 1995 and reaching 80% in 2010,
however
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, the 40% represented by rural areas decrease dramatically, reaching less than 10%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represent" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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