In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?
Due to
massive
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the massive
deveopment
of technology, globalization Correct your spelling
development
industries
and business are massively increasing in urban areas
.it is true that nowadays, in some countries Correct article usage
the government
government
are pushing Fix the agreement mistake
governments
indusriees
and business regional Correct your spelling
industries
areas
. I believe that there are both advantages and disadvantage
.
There are many reasons why Fix the agreement mistake
disadvantages
government
wants to shift these Add an article
the government
industries
to rural
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a rural
the rural
area
. Fix the agreement mistake
areas
Firstly
it is less expensive to start this
sector in rural
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a rural
the rural
area
. There is low cost in regional Fix the agreement mistake
areas
areas
including inputs and outputs.Secondly
, there are
more space in regional Change the verb form
is
areas
in compare
to urban which Replace the word
comparison
is
highly populated. Correct subject-verb agreement
are
Finally
, it is also
easy for theses
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these
business
to find Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
a
local Correct article usage
apply
people
for employment with
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at
low
cost. Correct article usage
a low
Moreover
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,Moreover
this
will help government
to reduce unemployment.Add an article
the government
To sum up
i
think rural development will start to Change the capitalization
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increas
and Correct your spelling
increase
peoples
becomes more Fix the agreement mistake
people
enged
in jobs as a Correct your spelling
engaged
results
there will be Correct the article-noun agreement
result
better
economic and high living Add an article
a better
standard
.
Despite these Fix the agreement mistake
standards
advantages
there are Add a comma
,advantages
also
some disadvantages of shifting these industries
in
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to
rural
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a rural
the rural
area
. Fix the agreement mistake
areas
Firstly
the environment get
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gets
pollute
.Replace the word
polluted
for example
air pollution, water pollution,Correct word choice
and defoestation
defoestation
will increase.Correct your spelling
deforestation
Secondly
the land that are used for cultivation are used by Add a comma
,Secondly
these industry
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this industry
these industries
as a result
many farmers and old people
who are uneducated lost their jobs. Moreover
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,Moreover
people
are unable to eat fresh food grown in
their land. Change preposition
on
Finally
, people
from these rarea
would be in Correct your spelling
areas
area
feare
of Correct your spelling
fear
loosing
their culture.
In conclusion, Replace the word
losing
Government
is trying some steps to develop regional Correct article usage
the Government
areas
by providing more oppurtunities
. It seems to there are Correct your spelling
opportunities
disavantages
of Correct your spelling
disadvantages
industries
but can be reduced wherase
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whereas
where
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think Change the capitalization
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this
is a great step to make people
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...