IN MANY COUNTRIES, THE TRADITION OF FAMILIES HAVING MEALS TOGETHER IS DISAPPEARING. WHY IS THIS HAPPENING? WHAT WILL BE THE EFFECT OF IT ON THE FAMILY AND SOCIETY?
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tradition
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the tradition
as a result
, the world is surrounded by full of lonely individuals. This
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on our relatives and community.
One possible major problem is the quarantine caused by contagion which has devastated millions of different nationalities people around the world. Fix the agreement mistake
consequences
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COVID-19, the recent pandemic. Change preposition
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This
means that our times for family gatherings in the life we had before pandemic
will be alternating until full recuperation.
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the pandemic
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overtime work
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the disequilibrium
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due to
conflicting family schedules. Hence
, it’s increasing the number of desolated people who can’t feel the pleasant vibe coming from the family meal while
eating alone.
On the other hand
, it is undeniable that the disappearance of family meals
can have several detrimental effects on the family. From the perspective of family, meals
taken together are the main feature to create stable
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the stable
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Moreover
, when they cannot spend much time for
eating together, the family bonds are likely to be loosened and Change preposition
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a child
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children
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atmosphere and lack of affection from their parents. Correct article usage
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Besides
, those lonely children are the future of our next generation, and they will format the world into
full of mentally damaged citizens.
In conclusion, having Change preposition
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meals
with family is really important but, due to
different
schedules of each member and Correct article usage
the different
pandemic
quarantine, Correct article usage
the pandemic
this
tradition is vanishing. Family members should take meals
together and parents should teach their child importance
of having Correct article usage
the importance
meals
together. This
is will help not child to become a better person but also
important for society.Submitted by nominotgonbayar1 on
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