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IN MANY COUNTRIES, THE TRADITION OF FAMILIES HAVING MEALS TOGETHER IS DISAPPEARING. WHY IS THIS HAPPENING? WHAT WILL BE THE EFFECT OF IT ON THE FAMILY AND SOCIETY?

#countries #tradition #families #meals #effect #society
It’s
sad
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true
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 that
tradition
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the tradition
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 of family dinner time is eliminating day by day, and
as a result
, the world is surrounded by full of lonely individuals.
This
 essay will outline two potential contributors and
also
it’s
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a consequence
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consequence
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 on our relatives and community. One possible major problem is the quarantine caused by contagion which has devastated millions of different nationalities people around the world.
Subsequently
,
this
 isolation separates and restricts us
to
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 do close contact with our beloved someone who
infected
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 with
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a decease
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decease
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disease
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.
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, even though; most of us have
vaccinated
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 and recovered from the illness that we had
suffering
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 throughout the previous years, we are still unable to encounter
with
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the dearest ones
due to
half
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lock down
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that
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prevented
from
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 COVID-19, the recent pandemic.
This
 means that our times for family gatherings in the life we had before
pandemic
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 will be alternating until full recuperation.
Furthermore
, another reason to must mention is
overtime-work
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overtime work
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 which is the root cause of
disequilibrium
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the disequilibrium
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 of work and life proportion. From the statistics,
two-third
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two-thirds
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 of
employed
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employees
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 reported working longer than their scheduled hours at least
on
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 day per month, and about a third of these worked extra hours because it was required by their employer. The main self-reported adverse consequences for workers
is
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interference
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the interference
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 of work with family time, and their inability to sit together at mealtimes
is
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due to
 conflicting family schedules.
Hence
, it’s increasing the number of desolated people who can’t feel the pleasant vibe coming from the family meal
while
 eating alone.
On the other hand
, it is undeniable that the disappearance of family
meals
 can have several detrimental effects on the family. From the perspective of family,
meals
 taken together are the main feature to create
stable
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the stable
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 family background.
Moreover
, when they cannot spend much time
for
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eating together, the family bonds are likely to be loosened and
as a result
,
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a child
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child
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children
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feeling
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cold
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 atmosphere and lack of affection from their parents.
Besides
, those lonely children are the future of our next generation, and they will format the world
into
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full of mentally damaged citizens. In conclusion, having
meals
 with family is really important but,
due to
different
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 schedules of each member and
pandemic
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the pandemic
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 quarantine,
this
 tradition is vanishing. Family members should take
meals
 together and parents should teach their child
importance
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the importance
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 of having
meals
 together.
This
 is will help not child to become a better person but
also
 important for society.
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