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Some organizations and companies say older people are better as leaders while some say young people are better as leader. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The issue of whether seniors or younger person is better as leaders to govern organizations, Is a long-standing debate, I believe that older people have the knowledge and experience to lead and teach their inexperienced co-worker at work and they are very trustworthy and truthful.
To begin
 with, in my ,opinion the main reason why an older person is more worthy to lead a
company
 is that they already have experience compared to the youngsters, For ,example
this
 older person is working in a different
company
 for maybe more than ten productive years and
then
 he transfers with
this
company
 with the same job as his previous
company
,
Therefore
 he knows already the process and techniques to better run these organizations.
On the other hand
, younger ones are
also
 capable of running a
company
 because they are aggressive, talented, judgmental and want to learn more and they are quick to decide a certain decision.
However
,
this
 is not the case for older people, because they are very patient and they think many times before deciding a certain decision to make. In conclusion, younger ones and older ones are both capable to govern and lead organizations, But based on my opinion and experience I still believe that older people are better than youngsters to lead a
company
.
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