The table below gives information about the percentage of workforce employed in six industries in Australia between 1989 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table compares the proportion of labourers hired over a decade from the year 1989 in six different industries across Australia.

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it can be observed that manufacturing accounted for the highest

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in 1989

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the highest employed sector was Health care in 2009. Tourism remains the

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industry for the given time period. In the year 1989, the highest

employment

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was seen in manufacturing and retail with 15% and 12% respectively. Meanwhile, health care constituted around 10% of the workforce. Construction and Education showed close to 8% of the employees. By 2009, there is a significant decline in the ratio of

employment

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in manufacturing. Even though there is a slight decrease, retail

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remains one of the highest employed industries with close to 10% workforce.

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, the remaining sectors observed an increase in

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of around 2% .

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The table below gives information about the percentage of workforce employed in six industries in Australia between 1989 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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In some countries, many people suffer from health problems due to eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that schools should invest more money in technology, such as more computers, while others think more money should be spent on teachers. Discuss both views and give your opinion.