The table below gives information about the percentage of workforce employed in six industries in Australia between 1989 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table compares the proportion of labourers hired over a decade from the year 1989 in six different industries across Australia.

Overall

it can be observed that manufacturing accounted for the highest

employment

in 1989

while

the highest employed sector was Health care in 2009. Tourism remains the

lowest employed

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industry for the given time period. In the year 1989, the highest

employment

was seen in manufacturing and retail with 15% and 12% respectively. Meanwhile, health care constituted around 10% of the workforce. Construction and Education showed close to 8% of the employees. By 2009, there is a significant decline in the ratio of

employment

in manufacturing. Even though there is a slight decrease, retail

also

remains one of the highest employed industries with close to 10% workforce.

In contrast

, the remaining sectors observed an increase in

employment

of around 2% .

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