The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,

and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts give
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information about the American’s consumption of 3 types of nutrients namely
sodium
, saturated fat and added sugar in different meals .
Overall
, it is obvious that
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sodium
and fat have
same
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the same
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tendencies when both
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for
dinner
mostly . Unlikely , the figure
of
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for
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sugar
show
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that people tend to add
this
to snacks .
Firstly
, the percentage of
sodium
is quite similar to
this
of fat , which
dinner
have a third with 43% and 37% and higher than three meals .
In
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other
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the other
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hand , people who have lunch consume
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the second
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highest that approximately a fourth .
Meanwhile
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the picture shows clearly the proportion of
sodium
spent for breakfast is as same 14% as snacks , in saturated fat ‘ s aspects , the use of
this
in breakfast is lower around 5% than for fast food Despite
in
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breakfast and
dinner
, likely 2 types with 16% and 19% . The ratio used for snacks become the highest number which is over a third and
lastly
, the sugar consumption for
dinner
is fewer about 19% than that .
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, dinner with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • typical meals
  • percentages
  • saturated fats
  • fibers
  • sugars
  • impact
  • average
  • consumption
  • trends
  • breakfast
  • lunch
  • dinner
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • implications
  • balanced diet
  • recommendations
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