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Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while some people think that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Perceptions regarding what we should prioritise when building a career have radically changed in recent years and become a highly
debateable
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debatable
 issue. Some claim that the
satisfaction
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 you get in your
job
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 is vital,
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 others disagree as think that having
security
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 is what should really matter. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both perspectives and explain why I agree that having stability is a lot more essential than
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satisfaction
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 is essential because of several reasons, the main one being its direct relation to performance. If employees are happy doing their jobs, there is a positive ambience and higher productivity at work.
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, satisfied staff tend to stay longer with the company and as result, there is a much lower attrition rate, which
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 benefits the
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 company performance. There are others,
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, who support the idea that the key to success in life is
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security
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.
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, the sense of
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 that guaranteed employment brings, similar to
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satisfaction
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, enhances trust in an employer, increases staff efficiency levels and helps to retain them.
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, a guaranteed contract implies not only a steady income but
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 gradual growth, which in its turn allows us to achieve more in life,
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, travel more, afford things we like, and make a relevant investment.
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, having a permanent
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 contributes to reducing stress and fear, creating a sense of stability.
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 a number of authoritative sources those with
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 insecurity were almost three times more likely to experience depression, anxiety and stress, respectively.
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,
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security
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 secures mental health and peace, which in my personal opinion, are vital to our well-being and happiness. In conclusion, even though
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satisfaction
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 is important, I believe that having
security
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 at work is far more significant if we want to reduce stress in life and enjoy it.
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