The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car.
The two
graph
illustrates the Change to a plural noun
graphs
reasons
that people give to supported
their desitions of using a bike or a car to go to work. Change the form of the verb
support
Overall
, the majority of workers
prefer driving a car for comfort, whereas
the workers
that chose cycling argue that they are doing it for
keep themselves healthy and fit and because is better for the Change preposition
to
enviroment
.
The first chart reveals that a very high percentage of Correct your spelling
environment
workers
prefer cycling because it is helpful for keep
them healthier and, at the same time, Change the form of the verb
keeping
produce
less pollution, about 60% of the answers corresponded to these two main Correct subject-verb agreement
produces
reasons
. This
figure is similar when we see the chart of the people that prefer driving but for different reasons
, a
61% of Correct article usage
apply
workers
prefer Add the particle
to drive
drive
because is more Wrong verb form
driving
confortable
and makes them arrive faster.
Other Correct your spelling
comfortable
reasons
for chose
cycling includes no parking problems, 15% of the Wrong verb form
choosing
asnwers
, cheaper %15 and it Correct your spelling
answers
fasters
than Add a missing verb
is fasters
drive
with 12% respectively. Wrong verb form
driving
However
, people who likes
driving said Change the verb form
like
that is
fatser
than driving with 14%, is better for Correct your spelling
faster
carry
things with 14% and Change the verb form
carrying
finally
11% said Add a comma
,finally
that is
safer than cycling.Submitted by dianejael on
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