The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car.

The charts below show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car.
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The two
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illustrates the
reasons
that people give to
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their desitions of using a bike or a car to go to work.
Overall
, the majority of
workers
prefer driving a car for comfort,
whereas
the
workers
that chose cycling argue that they are doing it
for
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keep themselves healthy and fit and because is better for the
enviroment
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environment
. The first chart reveals that a very high percentage of
workers
prefer cycling because it is helpful for
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them healthier and, at the same time,
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less pollution, about 60% of the answers corresponded to these two main
reasons
.
This
figure is similar when we see the chart of the people that prefer driving but for different
reasons
,
a
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61% of
workers
prefer
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drive
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because is more
confortable
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comfortable
and makes them arrive faster. Other
reasons
for
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cycling includes no parking problems, 15% of the
asnwers
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answers
, cheaper %15 and it
fasters
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than
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with 12% respectively.
However
, people who
likes
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driving said
that is
fatser
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faster
than driving with 14%, is better for
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things with 14% and
finally
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11% said
that is
safer than cycling.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, workers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • commute
  • sustainable
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • carbon footprint
  • fuel expenses
  • parking availability
  • gridlock
  • mass transit
  • individual choice
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