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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart compared
Australian's
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Australians'
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habit
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habits
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 of
coffee
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 and
tea
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 purchasing and drinking in
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last
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the last
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 month in Sydney,
Melbourne
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,
Brisbane
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,
Adelaide
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 and Hobart. It is noticeable that
Australian
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Australians
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 seldom purchased fresh
coffee
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 compared to the majority of residents
had
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who had
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coffee
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 and
tea
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 in a
cafe
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' in
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last
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the last
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 four weeks in five cities
beside
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Adelaide
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.
According to
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 the analysis, above fifty
proportion
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 of local people had
coffee
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 and
tea
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 in a
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cafe'in
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cafe in
cafe
last
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 month in Sydney,
Melbourne
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,
Brisbane
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 and Hobart. The highest of having
coffee
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 and
tea
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 in a
cafe
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' was almost 65
proportion
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 in
Melbourne
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, but the
proportion
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 of having
coffee
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 and
tea
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 in a
cafe
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'
below
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was below
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 50
proportion
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 in
Adelaide
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. The
proportion
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 of residents
bought
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who bought
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 fresh
coffee
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 was below 50
percentage
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percent
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 in five countries, and the lowest
proportion
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 of having fresh
coffee
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 was
roghly
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roughly
 35
percentage
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per cent
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 in
Brisbane
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4 weeks.
Overall
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, it illustrates that residents having
coffee
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 and
tea
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 in a
cafe
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'
was
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in was
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highest
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the highest
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proportion
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, in
cntrast
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contrast
 to, having fresh and instant
coffee
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in
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apply
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last
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 month in Sydney,
Melbourne
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,
Brisbane
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,
Adelaide
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 and Hobart.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, melbourne, brisbane, adelaide, cafe, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 7 times.
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