Some people believe that teenagers should focus on all school subjects while others think that they should concentrate on the subjects where they do the best or find the most interesting. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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all school
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others prefer that they should learn the
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it would be better if
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which is interesting for them. On the one hand, studying all
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is good for their improvement. Studying all
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given by school is good because of many reasons.
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, by teaching all
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children
are able to find their field without difficulties.
Also
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I saw that almost 88% of
children
who learn all
subjects
become successful people.
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interesting
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has
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advantages. By learning
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which is interesting for the
children
they can be professional
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their work.
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,
children
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for their work there achieve success faster than others because
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which is interesting for them.
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from the
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we can know that 79.7%
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learn
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necessary
as well as
interesting for them. Taking everything into consideration, I would prefer to learn
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vital and interesting because by
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helping it would be easy to achieve success
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