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Some people think that the Olympic Games is an exciting event and can bring nations together. Others, however, think that it is a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #olympic #games #event #nations #waste #money
The main purpose of
games
 is that it is meant to be played together and to have fun
in
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.
Olympic
Games
 is an event where different champions over the
world
 come to compete for their
Olympic
 medals and their name nationwide. It is
also
 a very great way of keeping yourself healthy and active.
Olympic
Games
 are held every year throughout the
world
 with different types of
sport
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sports
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 champions
compete
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competing
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 against each other in their best field, even fans worldwide come together to watch them perform or they watch through media stations
such
 as YouTube, TV etc. Different presidents and royal standards come and meet together and watch these champions compete.
Olympics
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The Olympics
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 does bring different communities and nations together by globalizing the event which results in various people regardless of their caste, religion, gender etc
to come
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coming
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 together and
enjoy
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enjoying
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this
 wonderful event. I personally disagree to think that it is a waste of
money
 but
infact
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in fact
 many different sports and events raise
money
 for charity and help millions of poor people
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for example
 the SDMN vs YT football match that raised
money
 to end
world
 hunger. In conclusion,
Olympic
Games
does
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do
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 a very good job
in
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of
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 bringing nations together and
also
 raising
money
 for charity and for the poor economical state of the
world
.
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