Although there has been a large increase in the numbers of women who go out to work, women continue to do a disproportionate amount of housework and childcare. What can be done to promote greater equality between men and women within the home?

One of the controversial questions is
gender
equality
that could not
been
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addressed between
men
and
women
within
home
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. People would think that housework and childcare are mostly
women
’s duties.
However
, in my view, there is much that can be done to address the problem constructively. There is no denying that it makes sense why most
women
are likely seen to be better suited to being.
Men
tend to be fairly aggressive and unhelpful in housework, which is one of the main reasons why
women
traditionally handle the majority of household chores.The immediate result it produces is the most prominent of which
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gender
discrimination. It restricts
women
's ability to pursue careers and rise to leadership positions. A better example of
this
can be best provided by Vietnamese
women
who still hold the belief that their parents often put pressure on their daughters to become
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good
housewife
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.
On the contrary
, equal husband and wife economic power can be a second approach to shorten
gender
equality
at
home
.
Women
are on the weaker side
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because they have less financial attribution for their family than
men
.
Therefore
,
women
should gain both knowledge and skills to take over the
men
’s sole breadwinners
as well as
to gain
equality
in their houses through which they can contribute financially
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their house well-being. Probably, there is some truth in the idea that
women
should spend time talking with their spouses about household and childcare responsibilities. Wives could persuade their husbands to share household responsibilities by pointing out the clear advantages of undertaking the chores,
such
as a closer bond with their children, and
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a good example for them. From what has been discussed above, we may draw the conclusion that greater
equality
between
men
and
women
within
home
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will probably not be solved quickly.
However
,
that is
not a reason to avoid taking action. Both
men
and
women
can encourage change by showing the way forward and taking advantage of the need to establish
gender
equality
as a norm within
home
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