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These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties.

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It is irrefutable that the advent of
technologies
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 have made it easier for people to seek job and
education
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 in diverse
countries
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. There are both pros and cons
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 prompt influx of immigrants to other
countries
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.
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 essay delves
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 advantages and disadvantages of the
migration
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 trend. Primarily,
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 colossal trend ameliorated the wages of people working in developing and
under developed
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 nations, thereby increasing their quality of life.
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, the opening of the immigration portal for computer engineers in Australia
a
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maasive
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massive
migration
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 of professionally qualified engineers, who are paid
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 their professional
qualification
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qualifications
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 and experience.
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,
migration
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 aid in addressing the labour shortage, which is imperative in the post-covid phase.
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, the
migration
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 of families
aid
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 in providing
world class
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education
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 to kids, which
inturn
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in turn
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 helps in the professional growth
if
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 the children.
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,
the
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health and physical
education
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 instilled results in generating healthier
communites
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communities
. The emigration
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 has its cons as well, just like a weed in every
graden
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garden
. The
emmigration
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immigration
emigration
 results in generating ghost cities and
graying
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 society.
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This leds
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 to
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 economic depletion of already
indegent
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indigent
countries
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. The mass influx
also
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 results in higher population density in the developed
countries
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 draining the resources. To put
in
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nutshell
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, I pen down saying that
migration
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 has its pros and cons, with
advantges
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advantages
 inundating the disadvantages. Higher wages improve the quality of life and provide better
oppertunities
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opportunities
 for the generation
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 in
building
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.
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, the improvement in quality of life and
education
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result
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results
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 in building a healthier community.
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