The diagram below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The image
illustrate
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illustrates
transformations
of West Park Secondary Correct article usage
the transformations
School
in the 60 years since 1950 when it was altered. Located beside the main road, the size
of the school
's main building has remained while
the surroundings show a lot of changes during the period.
To begin
in 1950, there were three residences next to the campus on the east side. In the south of houses and school
, there is Fix the agreement mistake
schools
Correct article usage
a rectangle
rectangle
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rectangular
grass
farmland and Change preposition
of grass
concrete
playground Correct article usage
a concrete
with
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of
a
similar Correct article usage
apply
size
.
After 30 years, the education
institution expands its Replace the word
educational
constructions
. The houses next to the Fix the agreement mistake
construction
school
became the science block and car park. In addition
to this
, the farmland function changed into a sports field. There is no transformation on the main building and playground.
Ending in 2010, the car park size
has been
extended three times Unnecessary verb
apply
than
before. Change preposition
apply
This
massive development caused the size
of the sports field and playground to become smaller, while
the block building of science and school
did not change.Submitted by fikriyatulfalashifah01 on
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