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Some people think that the best way to solve the problem of poverty in many countries is to set up businesses and improve trade links with rich countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

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Poverty
 in
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underdeveloped nations has always been
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 humanitarian crisis. Many people believe that the most optimal way to tackle
this
 issue is to establish trading
relationship
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relationships
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 with developed countries.
While
 I completely agree with
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 crucial for
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international communities to provide technological support. To improve the livelihoods of people, the essence is to ensure that money would flow into the bank account of
individual
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citizen
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. If a national financial market only operates domestically without any international trading relationship, it leads to a rigid economy that won't be able to distribute wealth to the general public.
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, doing business with other rich countries becomes significant for a country's development. China is a great example of how trades help
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proverty
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poverty
, it has lifted 90
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 of its population out of
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poverty
 and later became a wealthy nation since it officially
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world
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 trade organization.
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