The graph compares the rate of smoking in men and women in Someland between the years 1960 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.
The graph compares the
rate
of smoking in men
and women
in Someland between the years 1960 and 2000. It can be clearly seen that the rate
of smoking for both men
and women
is currently declining and that fewer women
have smoked throughout the period.
In 1960, 600 men
in every 1,000 was
smoking. Change the verb form
were
This
number decreased gradually to 500 by 1974 and continued to decrease but more steeply to 250 in 2000. In contrast
, the rate
of smoking in women
in 1960 was very low at only 80 in every 1,000. By 1968 this
increased to 170, and increased again but more steeply to 320 in 1977. The rate
of female smokers then
remained stable at 320 until 1984 at which point the figures began to decline and had
dropped to 200 by 2000.
In Unnecessary verb
apply
conclusion
we can see that the Add a comma
,conclusion
rate
of smoking in men
dropped throughout the whole period but was always at a higher level than the female figures. The rate
of smoking in women
increased until 1977 but then
decreased for the rest of the period.Submitted by Mrjit147 on
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