The graph compares the rate of smoking in men and women in Someland between the years 1960 and 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.

The graph compares the rate of smoking in men and women in Someland between the years 1960 and 2000.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.
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The graph compares the
rate
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of smoking in
men
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and
women
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in Someland between the years 1960 and 2000. It can be clearly seen that the
rate
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of smoking for both
men
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and
women
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is currently declining and that fewer
women
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have smoked throughout the period. In 1960, 600
men
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in every 1,000
was
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smoking.
This
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number decreased gradually to 500 by 1974 and continued to decrease but more steeply to 250 in 2000.
In contrast
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, the
rate
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of smoking in
women
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in 1960 was very low at only 80 in every 1,000. By 1968
this
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increased to 170, and increased again but more steeply to 320 in 1977. The
rate
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of female smokers
then
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remained stable at 320 until 1984 at which point the figures began to decline and
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dropped to 200 by 2000. In
conclusion
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we can see that the
rate
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of smoking in
men
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dropped throughout the whole period but was always at a higher level than the female figures. The
rate
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of smoking in
women
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increased until 1977 but
then
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decreased for the rest of the period.
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