The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.
The bar chart illustrates how many males and females studied full-time or part-time between 1970 and 1991.
Overall
, while
the number full-time
male Change preposition
of full-time
students
declined, the proportions
Fix the agreement mistake
proportion
for
female Change preposition
of
students
increased. In addition
, the fractions for part-time education
rose slightly, for both men and women in tertiary education
.
In 1970/71, the number of male students
in full-time education
accounted for around 100000, whereas
female students
made up just about 700,000. In the following years 1980/81, figures for both sex
represented similar, approximately 800,000 Change to a plural noun
sexes
students
. Then
the quantity
of women increased significantly to nearly 1100000, Change the quantifier
number
while
male
fraction constituted around 850.
Correct article usage
the male
In contrast
, men who studied in part-time education
were about 100,000 students
with women students
around 20,000 in the years 1970/71. Then
the figures for female and male students
were very similar, slightly increased
in 1980/81 to about 180,000 Wrong verb form
increasing
students
and in 1990/91 to approximately 200,000 learners.Submitted by zbirliknur01 on
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