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The pie charts illustrate the yearly spending for Canadian households in the
year
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years
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 1972 and 2002.
Overall
, in 1972 and 2002, most of the
money
 was spent on food and cars
whereas
 the least amount of
money
 was spent on computers and books respectively. In 1972,3% of yearly
income
 was spent on computers followed by books and restaurants at 7% and 8% respectively. Canadians used to spend 10% and 11% of their annual salary on petrol and furniture respectively. The second most popular item on which Canadians used to spend
money
 was cars and about 39% of their
income
 was spent on food which was the highest in that year.
Furthermore
, in 2002, the percentages of all the items changed. Only 3% of yearly
income
 was spent on books
whereas
 the same amount of
money
spent
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was spent
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 on furniture and petrol.
Moreover
, 11% of yearly
income
 was spent on computers followed by restaurants at 14%. Canadians used to spend 14% of their
income
 on food
whereas
 they started to spend
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 amount of
money
 on cars which were 40% of their annual
income
.
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