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The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pictures show the layout of a science
park
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 in 2008 and the changes that have taken place up until now. Taken as a whole, the
park
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 has gone through a number of major changes, with the most significant one being the construction of new features, which have been made possible at the expense of green spaces. It is
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 evident that the road infrastructure in the
park
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's perimeter has been significantly upgraded. In 2008, the
park
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 was accessible from the western, eastern and northeastern sides by car. There was a car
park
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 in the
centre
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 of the science
park
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 for visitors, which served the purpose of a bridge between business units in the west and the cyber security building in the southeast. Other major building complexes: a round-shaped IT
centre
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 and offices adjoining the reception were
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 part of the science
park
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. We can
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 see a railroad stretching from the west to the east in the southern part of the plan, and the remaining territory was either woodland or grassland. By now, a large number of developments have occurred in the
park
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. Included in these were the construction research and development building to the left-hand side of offices, the conversion of the reception into a university hub, and the enlargement of the cyber security premises (now it has an L-shape).
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, the existing IT
centre
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 has been converted into an innovation
centre
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,
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 the car
park
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 has been approximately halved in size.
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, transport facilities have been improved in the area by building a railroad station, laying brand-new footpaths throughout, building a bus station in the east, and adding a separate lane for cyclists.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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