The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.

The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.
The charts illustrate the expenditure of households in a particular European country
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spent on kinds of goods and services in 1958 and in 2008.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the percentage of food and housing
were
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higher than that of others in both years.
Moreover
, the money
of
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clothing
apporximately
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approximately
remain
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unchanged. In 1958, the proportion of food was higher than the figures for housing with the former standing at 32% and the latter being at 22%. The percentage of Entertainment was nearly twice as much as that of Luxury goods, at 13% and 7% respectively. The expenditure
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clothing was 18% which
double
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in
size
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of travel at 8%. In 2008, the proportion of housing increased dramatically,
peaked
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at 32%,
while
the opposite was true in food, at 12%. The percentage of luxury goods and
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rose significantly and
were
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the same, at 17%.
In addition
, the expenditure
of
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entertainment decreased sharply to 6%. Clothing
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experienced a
slightly
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drop
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2%.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • expenditure
  • commodities
  • services
  • necessities
  • luxury goods
  • trends
  • significant changes
  • expenditure
  • housing and utilities
  • summarize
  • highlight
  • primary trends
  • fifty-year period
  • economic growth
  • technological advancements
  • societal values
  • analyze
  • observe
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