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Air transport is increasingly used to export fruits and vegetables to countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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Air
 shipments across different nations regarding
food
 that are produced
seasonal
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 are in demand. The beneficial effects of
air
 transport are stability and manpower availability.
However
, the drawbacks are increased prices of commodities and strain on the environment. One advantage of importing fruit and vegetable is that
people
 could indulge in their cravings because it is readily available in the store.
In addition
, there would be no shortage in the stocks of
food
.
This
 will sustain the needs of
people
 regarding the accessibility of fruits and vegetables in the market. Another benefit, the increased production of
food
 means more employment
to
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people
 which results
to
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 economic growth.
Moreover
, many individuals will become productive and will have a prosperous life.
For example
, the Philippines is known for exporting bananas all over the world which helps generate income for the
people
.
On the other hand
, the disadvantage of the imported product is
increase
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 in
its
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 price cost on
food
 items. Apart from that, it would cause an additional burden to consumers in purchasing
this
 product.
Hence
, produced shift by plane has a tremendous effect on environmental pollution. The use of fossil fuels contributes to CO2 emissions that would result in global warming.
For instance
, a recent report indicated that 26% of global greenhouse gas production was from
food
 transport by
air
 accounts. In conclusion,
while
 the benefits of imported fruit and vegetable allow
people
 to eat a variety of
food
 all year round and the increased demand means more work and profit. The
food
 will become expensive and environmental pollution will worsen because of the negative effects of
air
 shipment.
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