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Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement?

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Retirement
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age
 has been a controversial topic in the
last
 10 years because of differences between sex genders (women retire before men), differences in
type
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the type
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 of
works
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 and
people
 with special health conditions. When it comes to having an established set
retirement
age
, there are a few things to have in mind to do so. In
this
case
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 there is a list of professions that
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 think that
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should have a lower
retirement
age
,
due to
 some special conditions like physical hard labour or mentally stressed workers like clinicians and
also
people
 who happen to work at very dangerous places,
such
 as construction workers or miners. These
people
 might retire earlier than others
due to
 the nature of their jobs. I agree that these
people
 could retire in advance to other
people
,
however
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 think that anybody who does not work in these industries could retire whenever they want and
this
 should remain. We
also
 have to consider that there will be some detrimental factors to these measurements.
For example
, we would have to constantly hire young
people
 for the lower
retirement
age
 industries since
this
 will renew staff very quickly. I
also
 think that if the worker is okay with the working conditions, we should give them the chance to continue working
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 their job fields, of course in
this
 scenario both parties would have to agree for
this
 to happen. The good thing about earlier
retirement
 is that we would be making sure that we are taking care of the
people
´s health who need to have a lower
retirement
age
 and that
this
 will bring benefits in the long term health.
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