the graph shows the proportion of population age 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries USA, Japan and Sweden .

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these statistics illustrate the percentage of groups aged 65 and over during 100 years in three regions.

it is clear that

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the USA had the top rank in 1940, it will stay at the lowest rate in 2040.

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, the percentage of older people in japan stood in the lowest rank though it will switch to the high rank in 2040.

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the graph, the figure for age65 years and over was about 5% in japan in 1940.

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, the proportion of the population in japan showing a marginal decrease between 1940 and nearly 1990.

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, that rose significantly from 1990 and it will stay over 25% in 2040.

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, there were the amount of USA and Sweden 9 and 7 per cent, respectively.

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, the statistics of these countries illustrate the number of people who were 6 years and over growing up rapidly and

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will stand at over 25%

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