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The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.

The charts below show the proportion of people’s total spending in a particular European country was spent on different commodities and services in 1958 and in 2008.
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The pie charts depict information regarding the percentage of
citizen's
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citizens'
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 total expenditure in a European nation spent on kinds of commodities and services in 1958 and 2008. The data is calibrated in percentage. At a fleeting glance,
it is clear that
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 a negligible difference was seen in the amount of
money
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 spent on clothing in both years.Moving forward, the
percentum
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per centum
 of utilizing funds on food was 32 and 12 in 1958 and 2008 respectively.
Next,
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in 1958 funds spent on Housing was 22%
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 in 2008 32% of the income was spent. On
further
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 analysis, it is lucid that a difference of 10% was seen in the expenditure of
money
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 on Luxury goods in both pie charts.
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this
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, the pie charts show that 13% of the
money
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 was used on Entertainment in the former
year
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 whilst almost half was in the latter
year
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. The utilization of funds on travel was approximately twofold in the latter
year
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, the figure was 8 and 17.
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, from an
overall
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 analysis, it could be stated that the maximum amount of
money
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 was used on Housing in the latter
year
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 and the minimum amount on Luxury goods in the former
year
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • expenditure
  • commodities
  • services
  • necessities
  • luxury goods
  • trends
  • significant changes
  • expenditure
  • housing and utilities
  • summarize
  • highlight
  • primary trends
  • fifty-year period
  • economic growth
  • technological advancements
  • societal values
  • analyze
  • observe
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