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Some people today believe that the world increases in population is unsustainable and will eventually lead to a global crisis. Other people believe that world population increase is necessary and beneficial as it creates the growth of the world’s economy and society -Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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Over the past few decades, there
have
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a
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sinificant
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significant
 growth in
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world
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the world
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population
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 and economy. It is a common public opinion that
,
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 the reason for
global
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the global
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 crisis is the
increasing
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of
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the
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population
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.
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other
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others
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 believe that, for the growth of
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world's
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the world's
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 economy and society it is
neccessry
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necessary
 to increase the
world
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population
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.
This
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accredible
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examples
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.
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 with, the rising
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population
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the population
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 will
leads
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 to
world
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condamination
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condemnation
contamination
. Human
beigns
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beings
being
 uses more natural
resoures
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resources
 like lake,Forest,Gas etc.. that will end up in
more
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 polluted
world
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For instance
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, if
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population
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the population
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 increased they need shelters. Nowadays all cities and
countryside
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the countryside
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 are maximum occupied by people. So they will try to construct
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a house
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house
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houses
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 by cutting trees in the forest for living there. Another example is
usage
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 of
vechiles
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vehicles
. In
the
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contemprory
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contemporary
 society, every single family have
two
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 or
three wheeler
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 for their
conveneint
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convenient
 transport.
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leads
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 to noise and air pollution. All these
resourses
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resources
 are
inevitabel
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inevitable
 for a human
beign
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being
life
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. So increase
pollutation
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pollution
result
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results
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 in crisis and damage to the
world
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.
on the other hand
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, to some extent, growing of crowd will give some
benefical
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beneficial
 advantage to the
world
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 economy and nation. In a
country
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,country
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 there is
mandatory
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a mandatory
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 Tax deduction is there for each item. So
devalopment
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development
developments
 in the
population
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 gives more profit for the government. To cite an example,
a
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survey
conduted
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conducted
 by MWCH
on
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 2018, in a family of 9 members, approximately they are paying 40% of tax from the
montly
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monthly
 income.
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boost
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 the
wellbeing
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well-being
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 of a nation.
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, from my point of view, it is
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a danger
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danger
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 to increase the
population
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Currenly
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Currently
 Global issue is a warning alarm for many countries. Control birth rate is good for
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world
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the world
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