Human activities have a negative effect on plant and animal species. Some people say that it is too late to do anything. Some people think that we should take effective action to improve the situation. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. ??

Whether leaders or directors of organizations should be old
people
or young
people
is being widely discussed currently. From my perspective, I think young
people
should lead the team. The reason that young
people
are suitable to become
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leader
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is that they have
higher
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ability
in acquiring new
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.
As a result
, they may have greater advantages in some new areas like the Internet.
The young
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people
have the willingness and
ability
to
adept
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and adjust
new
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technology as they are less experienced than old
people
. They may be more broadminded and can easily accept new thoughts, which makes them understand current trends and make plans that are suitable to deal with new problems.
However
,
the
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old
people
are more experienced than young
people
, which is a significant advantage. As they have been working for a long
time
, they may experience some complex
situation
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situations
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and enough practice to deal with those problems
while
young
people
may get nervous or have no idea about what to do when they face some accidents. What’s more, old
people
are less moody, which makes them steady and think twice before making decisions. In my point of view, I think that leaders can
also
be
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young
people
. They have stronger bodies so they are less likely to be ill, which gives them
ability
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the ability
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to lengthen
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their working
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hour
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and higher
ability
. What’s more,
according to
the
researches
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, young
people
may be more concentrated when working
while
old
people
have to relax from
time
to
time
, so young
people
may work more efficiently and effectively.
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,
the
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young
people
may not get married, so they do not need to worry about work-life balance. They may put most of their
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work and leadership,
while
old
people
have to spare some
time
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their
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.
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