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You will move to a new city for work. You know people who live there. In your letter, .Ask them for help finding accommodation  .Tell them where you would like to live .Tell them the type of place you are looking for Write at least 150 words. You do not need to write any addresses: Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir ______,

#move #city #work #people #accommodation #type #place #addresses #sir #______
Dear Sir James, I hope
this
 letter finds you in good health. I am moving to New York in April
this
 year. As you have lived in
this
 city
from
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past
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the past
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 20 years, I understand you know each corner of the city amazingly well. So could you please help me look for a place to live
.
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 Even though I am looking at the postings on
internet
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the internet
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 for a dwelling, you can access more means of
advertisement
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the advertisement
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 from the city like newspapers and notice boards. I am hoping to find
an
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apply
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accommodation in or near downtown New York as my placement for
job
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the job
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 has been done there.
Also
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 I think it will have a good view and wonderful amenities close by. Accessibility is
also
 thought to be increasing well in busy areas of a metropolis. Because mostly there are apartments available in jam-packed sections of
megalopolis
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the megalopolis
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, I am hoping to find myself an apartment too. It can save me time from the clean-up of a big house as I will have limited time well settling in the burg. I anticipate
to hear
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hearing
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a good news
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good news
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 from you soon. Yours faithfully, Sierra
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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