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The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. 150 words

The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. 150 words
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The given graphs illustrate the proportion of the British who listen to three types of
music
 (
pop
,classical,
rock
) depending on their gender and age and it is categorized into four groups .( 16-24,25-34,36-44,45+). Looking from an
overall
 perspective,it is readily apparent that men listen to more
music
 than female, at any age and it is independent of the type of
music
.Apart from classical
music
 , the 25-34
group
 is inclined much more to
music
 than other groups.
However
, 45+ people are more favourable to classical
music
.
Rock
 and
pop
music
 seem to be more attractive among individuals. Nearly 30% of males are
pop
music
 lovers,
whereas
 it is below 20% when it comes to females.The majority of
pop
music
 lovers are in the
group
 25-34 accounting for almost 30%.The more than 45 years
group
 shows minimal interest ( below10%)
Rock
music
 follows a similar pattern as
pop
music
,almost 30% of gents and below 20% of ladies prefer that genre.
Although
 less than 10% of the more than 45
group
 love
rock
 listening,30% of the 25-34
group
 embraces it,becoming favourite listeners.
On the other hand
 ,classical
music
 is more popular among the eldest
group
 accounting for nearly 20%.In the youngest , less than 5% are listeners.
Moreover
,it is the least popular one , with below 10% of males and just above 5% of females listening to it.
Submitted by g.s.subasinghe on

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words music, pop, rock, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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