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The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. 150 words

The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age. 150 words
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The given graphs illustrate the proportion of the British who listen to three types of
music
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 (
pop
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,classical,
rock
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) depending on their gender and age and it is categorized into four groups .( 16-24,25-34,36-44,45+). Looking from an
overall
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 perspective,it is readily apparent that men listen to more
music
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 than female, at any age and it is independent of the type of
music
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.Apart from classical
music
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 , the 25-34
group
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 is inclined much more to
music
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 than other groups.
However
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, 45+ people are more favourable to classical
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.
Rock
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 and
pop
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music
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 seem to be more attractive among individuals. Nearly 30% of males are
pop
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 lovers,
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 it is below 20% when it comes to females.The majority of
pop
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music
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 lovers are in the
group
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 25-34 accounting for almost 30%.The more than 45 years
group
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 shows minimal interest ( below10%)
Rock
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music
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 follows a similar pattern as
pop
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music
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,almost 30% of gents and below 20% of ladies prefer that genre.
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 less than 10% of the more than 45
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 love
rock
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 listening,30% of the 25-34
group
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 embraces it,becoming favourite listeners.
On the other hand
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 ,classical
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 is more popular among the eldest
group
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 accounting for nearly 20%.In the youngest , less than 5% are listeners.
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,it is the least popular one , with below 10% of males and just above 5% of females listening to it.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words music, pop, rock, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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