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Some people consider price as the most important thing to think about when buying products (such as cellphones) or services (medical treatments) do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, businesses are
majorly
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categorized
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 as Products or Services,
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 there are two vital parameters associated which are amount and condition. People often fall for cheaper
without
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 giving enough thought to the quality.
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 essay agrees that most people tend to give more emphasis to cost over the condition. On the one hand, the common consumer is being offered a lot of products and services at very competitive rates and
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prices
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. The user often faces difficulty
to finalize
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 the purchase and mostly considers expense as a good parameter to make a final call.
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, if there is a
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 selling at $600 and another one at $200,
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 there is a good probability that the customer buys the latter without making a deep trait comparison.
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, they tend to buy more because they feel good
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 buying cheaper produce.
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, there is a gentry segment that prefers
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 over expenditure. They are those people who know that the cheaper commodity does look good at first sight
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 in the long
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run
the
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, the
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 device will not be sustainable because of the bad standard.
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, they will opt for an IOS product compared to an Android one, just because IOS is more premium, will
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 longer and will have a better
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 service. To
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,
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yes,
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 there is a part of society that gives more priority to the rate tag rather than the longevity, Sustainability of the product. But
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 approach may seem to be a deal
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but
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 can backfire later on
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 the calibre of compromise.

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task response
Begin with a clear line that states your view on price versus quality and keep that view in all your points.
coherence
Use simple links to show how each idea fits with your view and with the next idea.
grammar
Make sentences short and fix any rough grammar so the meaning is easy to find.
examples
Give one or two small, concrete examples and say how they show price matters more.
position
The main idea is clear: price matters for many buyers.
evidence
The writer uses two examples to back up the view.
structure
There is a plan with two sides, on the one hand and on the other hand.

Your opinion

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