Nowadays movies and computer games containing violence are very popular. Some people believe that they have negative effect on the society and should be banned, others, however, believe that it is harmless entertainment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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recent years,
movie
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and
video
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industry are industries that had significant growth. Innovations are
also
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industry
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. They always try to make
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video
game
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games
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or movies as realistic as
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could be.
Consequently
, with
this
effort, crimes and
violence
also
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modern movies and
video
games
. These things brought
a
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controversy in
the
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society, whether
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they
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should be banned or not
due to
their potential to have negative impacts. For
this
problem
, the
author
believes crimes and
violences
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violence
acts of violence
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in
the
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movies and
video
games
should not be banned
,
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but should be constrained with age restrictions. To analyze
this
problem
, we must divide the consumer into two groups, which is
children
and
adult
.
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children
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such
violence
, gore, or criminal
contents
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may have
negative
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a negative
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impact on them.
This
problem
can happen since
children
is
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still in their developing process mentally and logically.
Moreover
, most of them
are
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still cannot
differ
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differentiate
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between reality and fiction.
For instance
, in Indonesia there
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case that two
childs
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child
imitate the WWE
video
game
moves, and it caused one of them
died
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. They do not know that kind of
moves
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is lethal
,
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if implemented in the real life.
Hence
,
children
in
this
case are really prone to
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be affected
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affected
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negatively
with
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by
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violence
and something like that. On the other side,
adult
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adults
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are really different in terms of processing the
violence
, criminal, or even gore
scene
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scenes
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in a
video
game
or
movie
. Because
of
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their
mental
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minds
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and logic are developed, they definitely can separate reality and fiction without ease.
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, if an
adult
watching
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watches
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a criminal
movie
they just treat the criminal
movie
is
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as
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for entertainment purposes.
Therefore
, for
adult
criminal and
violence
in a
video
game
or film are not dangerous.
To conclude
, from the statement above we can see that for
children
violence
and
criminal
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crime
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scenes in
video
games
or
film
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films
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are
have
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serious threats
due to
their still in
immature
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an immature
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phase mentally and logically. On the other side,
adult
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adults
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mental and logic are
matured
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enough to receive
such
violence
or criminal
contents
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content
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, and because of
that
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,that
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it will be harmful
for
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to
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that.
However
, with some pros and cons for
this
problem
, the
author
suggest
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to
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not
banned
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banning
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it. In spite
of
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, the
author
suggests that we should just have stricter age
restriction
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restrictions
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to access
this
kind of content. With that, the
author
ultimately believes it will better-off
the
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society as a whole.
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