Nowadays movies and computer games containing violence are very popular. Some people believe that they have negative effect on the society and should be banned, others, however, believe that it is harmless entertainment. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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the
recent years, Correct article usage
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movie
and Correct article usage
the movie
video
games
industry are industries that had significant growth. Innovations are also
the things that are not excludable in this
industries
. They always try to make Fix the agreement mistake
industry
a
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video
game
or movies as realistic as Fix the agreement mistake
games
it
could be. Correct pronoun usage
they
Consequently
, with this
effort, crimes and violence
also
depict in the
modern movies and Correct article usage
apply
video
games
. These things brought a
controversy in Remove the article
apply
the
society, whether Correct article usage
apply
it
should be banned or not Correct pronoun usage
they
due to
their potential to have negative impacts. For this
problem
, the author
believes crimes and violences
in Change the wording
violence
acts of violence
outbreaks of violence
the
movies and Correct article usage
apply
video
games
should not be banned,
but should be constrained with age restrictions.
To analyze Remove the comma
apply
this
problem
, we must divide the consumer into two groups, which is children
and adult
. Firstly
, for the
Correct article usage
apply
children
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,children
such
violence
, gore, or criminal contents
may have Fix the agreement mistake
content
negative
impact on them. Add an article
a negative
This
problem
can happen since children
is
still in their developing process mentally and logically. Change the verb form
are
Moreover
, most of them are
still cannot Unnecessary verb
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differ
between reality and fiction. Replace the word
differentiate
For instance
, in Indonesia there a
case that two Add a missing verb
is a
childs
imitate the WWE Correct your spelling
child
video
game
moves, and it caused one of them died
. They do not know that kind of Change the verb form
to die
moves
is lethalFix the agreement mistake
move
,
if implemented in the real life. Remove the comma
apply
Hence
, children
in this
case are really prone to Add a missing verb
be affected
affected
negatively Change the verb
affect
with
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by
violence
and something like that.
On the other side, adult
are really different in terms of processing the Fix the agreement mistake
adults
violence
, criminal, or even gore scene
in a Fix the agreement mistake
scenes
video
game
or movie
. Because of
their Change preposition
apply
mental
and logic are developed, they definitely can separate reality and fiction without ease. Replace the word
minds
For instance
, if an adult
watching
a criminal Wrong verb form
watches
movie
they just treat the criminal movie
is
for entertainment purposes. Correct your spelling
as
Therefore
, for adult
criminal and violence
in a video
game
or film are not dangerous.
To conclude
, from the statement above we can see that for children
violence
and criminal
scenes in Replace the word
crime
video
games
or film
are Fix the agreement mistake
films
have
serious threats Unnecessary verb
apply
due to
their still in immature
phase mentally and logically. On the other side, Correct article usage
an immature
adult
mental and logic are Fix the agreement mistake
adults
matured
enough to receive Replace the word
mature
such
violence
or criminal contents
, and because of Fix the agreement mistake
content
that
it will be harmful Add a comma
,that
for
that. Change the preposition
to
However
, with some pros and cons for this
problem
, the author
suggest
Change the verb form
suggests
to
not Change preposition
apply
banned
it. In spite Wrong verb form
banning
of
, the Correct pronoun usage
thisof
author
suggests that we should just have stricter age restriction
to access Fix the agreement mistake
restrictions
this
kind of content. With that, the author
ultimately believes it will better-off the
society as a whole.Correct article usage
apply
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