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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how

#english #school #languages #risk
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 important
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a global way of communication, recently most
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the
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countries are focusing on teaching it
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whether
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 as a first or second
language
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school
 because it is the most common
language
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to be able to cope with other nations. In
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essay
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 I'm going to share my opinion about how much is it important to learn
English
 and how to save our native languages. It is obvious nowadays that
English
 is a worldwide and effective way that
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the
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people from
allover
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 the world to communicate easily and understand each other through it.
However
, learning
English
 might be very difficult for some countries
such
 as India, China and many other countries who face some
obstecals
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obstacles
 when trying to
pronouncing
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English
 letters.
This
 may affect the probability of
these country
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these countries
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 to accept
English
 as a second
language
.
Nevertheless
, some of
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 nations are scared that if
English
 has
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 in
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school
 for kids
these
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 growing population might only use it and forget about their own
language
espicially
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especially
that
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this
language
 is spreading so fast. If
English
 is been taught in all communities, it is thought that one day the local languages will disappear. In my
opinion
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this
 is not a big issue as long as people can talk to each other I don't see it as a big concern.
In contrast
, some nations do not accept
this
 idea and they still
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 their
language
 and no other in order to save it. I
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believe
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 that in order to be able to balance
between
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these two ideas;
English
 has to be
taought
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taught
 in the latest years starting from high
school
 until university
this
 can give the students the chance to have
strong
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 base from their native
language
 and
also
learning
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new
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language
 can help them in the future.
To conclude
,
English
 is the most common
language
 in the world and it facilitates
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communication between so many
diffrent
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different
 regions. I think it doesn't matter
weather
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whether
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 you use it
in
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early or later in life.
However
, for sure it has a great impact on local languages. In my opinion
delying
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delaying
denying
 the
English
 subject in
school
 might solve the issue.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
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