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With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#development #communication #people #friends
Nowadays, a lot of
people
 say that with the development of online
communication
,
people
 will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends. Well, there is something I can disagree with. We live in the age of social
medias
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,
each
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and each
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 day we meet new
people
 online that can
potentionally
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potentially
 become our friends.
However
, more
people
 become more
introvert
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, they feel
lack
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a lack
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 of real
communication
, not
an
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online one. We can see a strong tendency now, that young
people
, especially teens, spend almost half of the day on
some
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Facebook or TikTok, wasting their time on nothing. It strongly affects their ability to bond with
a
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real
people
,
degrades
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and degrades
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 social and
communication
 skills.
As a result
, a person in their
20`s
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20s
 can`t even make an appointment
to
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 the doctor
by
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 their own.
Moreover
, it is known that
people
 need
people
. That`s why an online friend, you may find other night
while
 surfing on Internet, can`t replace the real human near you, who can embrace you, encourage and cheer
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. And
last
 but not least - online friends are not exactly trustworthy. You know nothing about the person you have met, no actual valid information you can check,
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 have never seen them in real life. That`s one of the strongest negative sides of online friendship - you never know who is hiding there behind the screen, so it`s better
watch
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 your back and be careful with all information you want to share with a
strager
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stranger
.
To conclude
, my point is that
development
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 of online
communication
 has nothing to do with
a
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making a friend. It may be
faster
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 way to communicate, but not the most effective one. What is more, friendship still requires
numbers
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 of skills to bond with someone, so you won`t become a social butterfly just because you chat with someone, but
not
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 actually talk. So go grab some coffee and take your mate for a walk, rather
that
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than
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 lay in bed all day talking with online creep.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • geographical gaps
  • interact
  • social media platforms
  • messaging apps
  • revolutionized
  • physical distance
  • online communities
  • camaraderie
  • immediate surroundings
  • unparalleled opportunities
  • superficial relationships
  • excessive reliance
  • emotional warmth
  • tactile comfort
  • digital communication
  • digital divide
  • internet censorship
  • global connectivity
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