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A good friend has just changed schools and is having difficulty fitting in and needs your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • make suggestions as to how they could make friends • suggest joining clubs, participating in school activities • give any extra general advice You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear...,

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Dear Temi, It is with great pleasure I write to you. I learnt that you have recently changed your
school
; congratulations! I hope you are settling in well enough. I understand that making
friends
 is giving you a tough time, especially knowing that you had good
friends
 in your previous
school
. Well, there are various ways of making good
friends
,
this
 can be by joining extra curriculum activities in your new
school
, paying your classmates a visit during a festive period or a celebration. Adding to
this
, actively participating in
school
 events like inter-house sports,
Christmas
Correct word choice
and Christmas
show examples
 carols can help you make
friends
. Me , I made
friends
 in the library, by discovering we had
a similar interests
Correct the article-noun agreement
similar interests
a similar interest
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 in novels. Having
friends
 helps your social life, and you have someone to share your thoughts with. I strongly believe that when you engage yourself in
school
 activities, you will make good
friends
. I advise that you
also
 show kind gestures to your classmates by giving gifts. In conclusion,
friends
 make life beautiful, thank you for the gift of our friendship. I cannot wait to receive your letter telling me about your new
friends
. Yours sincerely, Feyi.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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