Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, others think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both ways and give your opinion.

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university. Some argue that having a high
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interview with them or not since they usually get
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known as
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highly paid
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the
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certification to be,
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education
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. Most professional work values
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experience rather than education. One example is
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manager. Many successful stage managers have
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excellent communication skills and are very organized which
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their daily experiences.
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working in
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field,
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and painters do their
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using their own artistic views. These are learned through their activities and sometimes come from their outstanding level of perception and talents. In conclusion, I believe that it varies depending on
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whether they should have a high
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qualification
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or not. Some high-paid
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need
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specific
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available to those who did special
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many professional jobs cherish the experiences that
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went through.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • structured and comprehensive understanding
  • specialized skills
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving abilities
  • career advancement
  • networking opportunities
  • internships
  • alumni associations
  • career services
  • practical experience
  • hands-on skills
  • trades, arts, and technology
  • soft skills
  • communication
  • teamwork
  • leadership
  • real-world working environment
  • job performance
  • career growth
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