The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

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The chart compares the proportions of
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males and
females
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in six age categories who were physically active on a regular basis in the year 2010. Roughly speaking, close to half of
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adults did some kind of routine physical
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in 2010. Middle-aged
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were the most physically active, proportionally,
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males aged 35 to 44 did the least physical
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. In the youngest age category (15 to 24), almost 53% of
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men but only 47.7% of women did
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regular physical
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in 2010.
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, between the ages of 25 and 44, men were much less active on average than women. In fact, in the 35 to 44 age group, a mere 39.5% of males did some form of regular exercise, compared to 52.5% of
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. Between the ages of 45 and 64, the figure for male physical
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rose to around 45%,
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the proportion of active
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remained around 8% higher, at 53%.
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, the percentages of
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women and men aged 65 and over who exercised regularly were almost identical, at approximately 47%.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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