The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
The chart compares the proportions of
Australian
males and
females
in six age categories who were physically active on a regular basis in the year 2010. Roughly speaking, close to half of
Australian
adults did some kind of routine physical
activity
in 2010. Middle-aged
females
were the most physically active, proportionally,
while
males aged 35 to 44 did the least physical
activity
. In the youngest age category (15 to 24), almost 53% of
Australian
men but only 47.7% of women did
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regular physical
activity
in 2010.
However
, between the ages of 25 and 44, men were much less active on average than women. In fact, in the 35 to 44 age group, a mere 39.5% of males did some form of regular exercise, compared to 52.5% of
females
. Between the ages of 45 and 64, the figure for male physical
activity
rose to around 45%,
while
the proportion of active
females
remained around 8% higher, at 53%.
Finally
, the percentages of
Australian
women and men aged 65 and over who exercised regularly were almost identical, at approximately 47%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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